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Error #
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Solution Explanation
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(1)
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The
purpose should always be phrased in terms of the audience.
A correct Specific Purpose for this speech would be, “to inform
the audience about State University’s classrooms.”
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(2)
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The
correct organizational pattern is topical order. The classrooms
are being divided up into their component subtypes. In this
case the words “First”, “Second”, etc. beginning each main
point are serving as transitions connecting the outline points.
For this to be procedural order the main points must happen
in the order they are written. |
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(3)
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Thesis
Statements must always be complete sentences. “State University
has three different basic classroom types” or “I’m going to
tell you about State University’s classrooms” would both be
acceptable Thesis Statements for this speech. |
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(4)
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You
can never have a “1” without a “2”. You would either have
to think of a “2” or combine “1” and “A”. |
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(5)
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Subpoint
“B” should end at “State Main Hall”. Three different things
are said about State Main Hall. “Seats five hundred and fifty
students” is the first of the three things and should be support
point “1”. |
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(6)
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This
point has more than one idea. The three television monitor
locations should each be separate further support points. |
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(7)
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There
should be a capital “A” in “and”. The first letter of every
outline point must be capitalized. |
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(8)
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There
are two errors in this point. First, the “a” of further support
point “a” should be written under the “T” of “The new Physics
lab”. Second, there are two ideas, one on either side of the
“and” in further support
point “a”. They should be divided into further support points
“a” & “b”. |
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(9)
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Further
support point “b” should be support point “2”. the “biology
labs” are not more specific examples of “physics labs”. |
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(10)
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Thee
are two ideas in this point. They should be divided up into
support points “1” & “2”. |
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(11)
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Thee
are two ideas in this point. They should be divided up into
support points “1” & “2”. |
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(12)
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Thee
are two ideas in this point. They should be divided up into
further support points “a. Plants” & “b. Cacti”. |
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(13)
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Two
more specific pieces of information are given about Rachel
Nicole. They should be divided up into further support points
“a” & “b”. |
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(14)
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This
point is irrelevant. The main point is dealing with “standard
classrooms”. The “lecture hall” lecterns should not be mentioned
here. They should be discussed under main point “I”. |
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(15)
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There
are five ideas in this point. Each color dry erase marker
should be a separate support point. |
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(16)
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This
main point and supporting subpoints are not relevant to the
Thesis Statement. “IV” discusses “class schedules”. The Thesis
Statements talks about “classrooms”. This main point and three
subpoints should be deleted. |
